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This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 35; the thirty-fifth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton. The theme for the month is "...and the world was silent again"
I, an unwanted consequence of an inebriated desire of a respected creature of his society, was born on a busy road. Passerby watched with amazement as I was unwanted, but the world was silent.

Outside on the pavement of the toy shop where my days of infancy were spent, I craved for many things. People went in and came out with pitiful eyes screaming that I was unwanted but the world was silent.

The school in which my mother worked as a cleaning lady, I was unwanted irrespective of the promises I displayed as a child prodigy, and the school where I went was never cleaned, but the world was silent.

I faced all the challenges thrown at me by my destiny with a straight face even though all my dreams succumbed because of only one requirement, whereas uncountable crores were unaccounted, and the world was silent again.

But, suddenly everybody started speaking, everybody started cursing, a highly respectable citizen of this society had died.

“Why was the world not silent this time?” Labelled as a terrorist, this thought randomly crossed through my mind. “Perhaps, because nobody knows that he was my father, or do they?” I smiled.


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38 comments:

  1. Nice piece of writing :).. Good Idea.

    All the best!!!

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  2. I say first clean the ministers before cleaning the society...the change should come from top.

    Nicely written. Short and perfect.
    All the best for batom

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    1. Thanks Megha ... I so agree with you but what disturbs me most is that we make these ministers ...

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    2. Yea...it's like..to choose who's the least chor from all the thugs..

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  3. The circumstances speak for the terrorists! Well-written... Liked the way.. ATB for the BAT..

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    1. Thanks Harikrishna ... Circumstances, yes, we are at the mercy of the circumstances...

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  4. These lines that you wrote very touching...full of sentiments...wish society could change the mentality...like we change clothes...!!!

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    1. Yes Anjan, we seriously need to introspect within ourselves ... Thanks :)

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  5. I don't know if I like this..or totally hate you for writing this. I'm not sure what your heart REALLY REALLLYYY wanted to convey. Whether we, the Nation made him a terrorist by being silent of his poorness (which is not in our hands? it's in his/his parent's) OR that the feelings of that child/terrorist are innocent, in which case he is innocent of his terrorism?? :O Oh my, now you scare me too.

    Whatever it is (do tell me and if this is a part of the novel you're initiating..?)this is one post that actually intrigued me. Couldn't just say great post/nice/bla bla..so *thumbs up* - but do let me know because I just joined your website due to consistent great content!! :O :)

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    1. No Chhavi, this is not part of the novel and looking at your reaction I am glad it is not :) :) ... and yes, I would like to have rather request your feedback on the prologue of my novel as well. It is important for me.

      Coming back to this post. I used the word terrorist not criminal. The protagonist of this novel is just a criminal not a terrorist, the way I understand. But, he was leveled terrorist. Don't we have examples in our country where a crime is given the color of terrorism because of political reasons. Moreover, a crime of a influential person never invokes that kind of furore.

      No one (except the politicians, but they have limited resources, not enough for themselves let alone looking towards the poor, but as I said to an earlier comment, we make these politicians) is responsible for the increasing inequality and disparity, but somewhere it is also true that the rich, to a certain extent, don't respect the poor the way they deserve. I am not raising a finger on anybody, because I know that four fingers are pointing towards me, I am part of the same society.

      Thanks that you gave me an opportunity to clarify my point of view, initially I had thought to include these as part of the write up, but then I thought that the issue is more sensitive than I could ever imagine or describe, so I left it on individual interpretations.

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    2. This definitely is a very sensitive issue..what ever you have said is definitely true. But being destitute is not an excuse to do crimes! I've seen some very destitute people who have actually helped others and try to live their lives happy in what they have.

      And then again I've seen well-off people doing crimes!! (I was not specifying terrorism or criminalism..just the general term!)

      Will definitely look at your prologue and give you my honest opinion :)

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  6. Good piece, Amit! Replace all your 'but the...' with 'and the...' and you will fit the contest requirements exactly :)

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    1. Thanks Suresh... I think I met the contest requirement by using at one place... Didn't I :) :)... I phrased the write up in way that wherever there was only the personal issue of the protagonist was mentioned I used "but" but when I used a very general topic like black money I used "and". I wanted to make a distinction, nothing else... :)

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  7. I missed saying 'multiple times' there :)

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  8. you know usually we blame everything around us , but don't really do anything about it. this post kinda felt like that, maybe im wrong with regard to my interpretation. But if the protagonist was so bothered about his surrounding, inspite of his upbringing, he should have done something towards it .... newys ATB for BAT :)

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    1. Didn't I write that he fought ... neways thanks...

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  9. U have made a point in a very few words...intriguing post

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  10. U have made a point in a very few words...intriguing post...

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  11. I get your intent and the take on the topic.

    However the usage of the word 'terrorist' was quite shocking. I haven't come across any news or report of any kind, where this word 'terrorist' has been used lightly (the way you have). I doubt if even the illiterate of this country would use such a labeling in this context (the way you've laid it out). Terrorism is a very serious concern and this piece almost trivializes it (I know you didn't mean anything even remotely like that)

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    1. I dont want to site examples here but refresh your memory, how many news of fake encounters have you heard/read. Go back in time of Khalistan Movement, there were numerous such incidents. well! I dont want to get into details. neway, thank a lot...

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    2. Agreed mate. But I think you are mixing up words like 'criminal', 'encounter', 'mafia extortion', 'fanatic', 'bigot', 'militant' with 'terrorist'. I did think hard to recollect if this word was thrown around or abused: however, every item I've encountered backed up the crime with the phenomena of 'terrorism'. Your story is a revenge story: I don't know if 'many' were killed to target 'one person', the story doesn't give me the details. And that's why I said you've used the word very loosely.
      I get the intent of your writing and I can comprehend the emotional anguish of your protagonist and consequently the grave measures he employed.

      All this being said, you might be right that this word has been abused. I wouldn't deny the possibility.

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    3. There have been misuse... Perhaps I should have mentioned a bit of background, but I intentionally wanted to keep it short... Thanks :)

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  12. i could grasp the emotional turmoil of the protagonist thoroughly . . but i feel nurturing an attitude to seek revenge , as the guy here is apparently doing , doesnt deserve to be applauded . But your post definitely is commendable :)

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  13. I had to read it twice to understand. hitting! Though I hold my reservations for the word 'terrorist'. May be the person killed, held quite a prominent post in society, so his assassination is being linked to an act of terrorist. You could built on the plot and justify the use of term.

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    1. Yes. I could have built a plot but I have carefully used the words.. When in the first line I used, respected creature of his society, I tried to give a background to his father also. Thanks :)

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  14. Very well written. Something to think.

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  15. Nice stuff buddy boy. I enjoyed reading.. and in my mind, formed the picture of a young, poor boy.

    Although I HATE BAT posts that are a part of something bigger (a series or something), but I liked what you wrote.

    As a practise, I come back to see the responses to my comments at the end.. and that is when I will happily read the prologue. Right now, trying to read as many posts as possible before the voting deadline. Thanks :)

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    1. Thanks Kshitij, glad that you liked it... hey its not a part of the novel ... a completely different post for the BAT only...

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    2. Woah! This is the second time this BAT that I am 'projecting' I did not read the post properly. Don't know why it happened.

      Let me read your prologue.

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